Poem anyone?

Just wrote this poem for the class of the English language studies (English 10th grade (honors)).

so there is no title for it yet, but I was considering "Falcon."

here goes,

So the tree,

Looming over head,

Reminds me of my loss.

I take off,

All in sight,

Miles of therapy pass.

And then seeing the tree,

Underfoot. But where skies past,

I set my shadow in his sight,

To let know I am near,

Watching, Pondering, Longing.

Carnivores cut, and I,

Weep.

O perturbed Homicide,

Natures laws, grief.

How the stirring the emotions,

Rash decisions,

To let go,

Is to be free.

And thus I fall.

By Collin White

so tell me what'cha think. And yes Sydney I know, GRAMMER/ PUNCTUATION crap. I don't care, so long as I get what I want across(and get a good grade).